"He'd just stare at you, intensely, with those dark eyes and perfectly knotted tie until you started stripping of your volition."

That is a great line. I will accept your criticism because that might be the most poetic comment I've ever received.

Loved the punch line, but the opening didn't work for me. "Take off your clothes" is Tomas's line from The Unbearable Lightness of Being. Don Draper wouldn't say it. He wouldn't say much of anything. He'd just stare at you, intensely, with those dark eyes and perfectly knotted tie until you started stripping of your volition.